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story by :iconzenox-furry-man:

:iconoswaldtherabbitplz: "awww you was so sweet when you stopped me, you was afraid I could became a monster?"

:iconortensiafacepalmplz: "no! I was afraid you could burn your hand, I need you to change the diapers on our kids!"

:iconoswaldtherabbitplz: "....."
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:iconchrismilesprower:
Chrismilesprower Featured By Owner May 19, 2015  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
The Thinner Disaster. But wasn't the bottle filled with thinner?
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:iconadvanceddefense:
AdvancedDefense Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist Filmographer
I see you take reference from the graphic novel.
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:iconsparklestar14:
sparklestar14 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
Nice
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:icontartoon-man94:
TaRtOoN-Man94 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013
The Sky Is Falling :iconchickenlittleplz:
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:iconpikachulover94:
pikachulover94 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
ooooooo awesome
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:iconepicparadot:
epicparadot Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Artist
just pulls a gun out of nowhere.he must be part wizard
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:iconcrazyman5291:
crazyman5291 Featured By Owner May 30, 2015
to be fair, I thought it was a gun at first to, and at that, I thought to myself, well that's a bit dark for Oswald. But then I realized it was his blowtorch, and then everything was fine.
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:iconthyneownslave:
ThyneOwnSlave Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Professional General Artist
Actually, that's the blowtorch Oswald had in his hand earlier while working on the statue.
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:iconsteadfastheartofgold:
SteadfastHeartofGold Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm really enjoying this. *u* You two are a great team.
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:iconshrekrulez:
SHREKRULEZ Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
Poor Oswald but Mickey is still your brother no matter what.
Also great dark element in storytelling from that scene.
You are one extraordinary artist in Deviantart. GREAT JOB!
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:iconvianylove:
vianylove Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
why oswald had a gun like magic?

COOL STUFF
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:iconhexpinteas:
hexpinteas Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Awesome work! As always! XD
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:icondrock625:
Drock625 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
Your english is good but still there are some errors.

Seventh panel, first narrative paragraph, second sentence. "He was the ruler of wasteland and no one, neither that mouse could change it"
See the problem? Change that "neither" to "not even" and "could" to "can". It makes more sense.

Seventh Panel, second narrative paragraph, "but he still not wanted to see Mickey's face around so he began to piled all that stuff away from wasteland... forming a huge mountain called 'mickeyjunk mountain'."
Change that "but he still not wanted" to "But still, he didn't want to see Mickey's face around" you see? it makes more sense.

Also
"So he began to piled all that stuff away from wasteland" okay for "piled" I don't think "pile" is a verb. You know what a verb is. Pile cannot be used as a verb, it's a noun, now there are some similar verb sentences that are similar to pile.
For Example: Arrange in stacks. Pressed Tightly together, or cram. To place or lay as if in a pile.
SO yeah don't use the word "pile" it's not a verb.

for this sentence I would say:
"So he began to stack everything away from wasteland, causing a huge mountain called 'Mt. Mickeyjunk'." (or Mickeyjunk Mountain, Doesn't matter)


Now for your last three boxes.

The first after that comma "and from it fallen a open bottle with a strange black liquid inside..." Change the first "a" to "an" and take the second "a" between "with" and "strange" away. Thus appears this: "And from it, fallen an open bottle with strange black liquid inside..."

Second box, there seems to be no continuity to it from the first box, "that object fallen on the mountain" It seems as though you started another sentence. Instead of saying "that object" replace it with "had", then we get: "had fallen on the mountain" now try adding this to your first box.

And the final box "and all become dark" Fit's okay but there is a more professional way. I would say: "and darkness befell on Wasteland"

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Watery-Flame Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
NNNOOO NOT WASTELAND CURSE YOU BLOT!!! :pissedoff:

I love this so much!!!!! :squee:

Ortensia just wanted Ozzie to change the kids? Nice
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:icontailsfan253:
tailsfan253 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
i love it
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:iconcrazycakesune:
CrazyCakesune Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Jajajajajaja XD I liked your coment XD
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:iconjebest:
jebest Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Student General Artist
I love your story for the Prolouge to the Epic Mickey games and this fits perfectly.
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:iconmogwai1988:
Mogwai1988 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The focus at the beginning of the page, looks so awesome! Especially in the 4th one, when the plush goes out of focus and you can really look into the blowtorch.

Really love how Ortensia is portrait. Like she's the one who's keeping Oswald's sanity intact.

Lol at the artist description though. :P
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:iconzdforrest:
ZDForrest Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Student Filmographer
Here comes the blot!
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:icontruffulagirl:
TruffulaGirl Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Student General Artist
I CANT WAIT FOR MORE!!!!!!!!!!!
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:iconjackanarchy99:
jackanarchy99 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
If only Oswald could understand, it wasn't Mickey's fault he was forgotten. It's greedy, immoral men who took him away from Walt. It's a shame Walt couldn't live to see his 'first son' returned to him.
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mickeydisneyfan Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Student
I think mickey's about to come...
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:iconjackfreak1994:
jackfreak1994 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Squealed at the Ozzie x Ortensia moments, they're so cute !!! :3

Both you and :iconzenox-furry-man: make a great team in creating stories/Illustrations. Big thumbs up on the beautiful comic!
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:iconcimorine90:
Cimorine90 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
lol at the comment, but oh shoot, I sense a hero's journey coming on! :D
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:iconatomicf0x:
AtomicF0x Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:icondolanplz::iconsaysplz:Ortensia plz.
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:iconartisticanri:
ArtisticAnri Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Student General Artist
lol :icongoobyplz:
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:iconchana00:
chana00 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013   Writer
nice page! You made my night.

so how did all that mm stuff get there in the first place?

and if ozzie hates mick so much, why did he go and LIVE on top of the mountain?

so he could torture himself by staring at mick's face all day?!

ortensia must be unusually nice to make such a good contrast to oswald's personality
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ArtisticAnri Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Student General Artist
The Mickey stuff was probably discontinued merchandise, you know like after a while they stop making an item and stop selling them in stores.
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:iconchana00:
chana00 Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013   Writer
maybe..
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:iconhalfmadcharacter:
HalfMadCharacter Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Student General Artist
homes, places we've grown, all of us are done for...
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:iconstarsailor5:
starsailor5 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Student Filmographer
Oh man, ortensia was SLIGHTLY wrong
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:iconheyheyheygirl4:
Heyheyheygirl4 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
Something bad is bound to happen.
Continue!
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Bluetita Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Student Artist
:iconoswaldlaplz:ohhh, everything makes sense now! I always wondered from where did oswald got the giant bottle in wich he imprisoned the blot, I never thought it was the solvent bottle that mickey accidentaly threw into the wasteland :iconmickeytrollplz:
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:iconwarriornun:
WarriorNun Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Rage shall consume you!
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:iconmonkchoo24:
monkchoo24 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
So that's how it all happened?~
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MightyMorphinPower4 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
Very moiving work
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:icon09alih:
09alih Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:cries:
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:iconwarriornun:
WarriorNun Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Cooldown hug, always works.
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:iconsky-lily:
Sky-Lily Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
LOL, that conversation. xD And that's a looooot of diapers to change...

Also, thank you so much for illustrating this story through comic! I can't understand the original author's language. ^^'
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Lost-InMyWonderland Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Awwwww OrtensiaxOzzie moment. <3 That's really adorable ^_^ I love this page, especially the suspense left in the last panel right before the thinner disaster
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:iconpimpaladettesdude:
pimpaladettesdude Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
i kinda remember this but so THATS how mickeyjunk mountain was formed hmmm quite interesting :)
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:iconprincesscarol:
PrincessCarol Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Student Photographer
oh my
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:iconprincessofdisney27:
princessofDisney27 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
oh man your description there hahah XDD and yes! were getting close to the game here lol XDDD woot keep it coming!!
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:iconandysimba1998:
AndySimba1998 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
:o
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:iconsonicxjones:
sonicxjones Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Mickey. "I'm sorry Oswald...I had no idea.."
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cRaZyKiD9219 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
:(
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:iconzenox-furry-man:
Zenox-furry-man Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconzenox-furry-man: :" bugia!!!!" *urla dalle retrovie*

Scherzi apparte bellissima e piena d'emozione questa pagina meoooow!!!
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twisted-wind Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
:iconlooolplz:
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